Comments : Dreaming is the only place

  • 11 years ago

    by Matthew Schut

    Wow dude...good stuff. really deep and makes me think. I could relate and it brought me back to memories of my past...good stuff bro.

  • 11 years ago

    by CanUKissAwayMyPain

    Aww.. sad. bery sad. the image sleep on the bed without the one u love. remembering her right there byurside. and with one blink she's gone. but the memories are stil there floating in ur mind never lettign them go. they bring smiles, laugh n tears. a lovely poem you wrote here truly. i love it. keep it up!! 5/5

    TaKe CaRe,
    Frenchy

  • 11 years ago

    by themeuneverseen

    Very well thought out poem.
    it painted a mysterious picture in my mind.
    keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great poem the wording was great. The flow was good. I gave ita 5/5.

  • 11 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Sab and touching ...

    "another day has come and gone
    i lay my head on your pillow once more
    ill close my eyes and start to smile
    letting memories once again flood over me"

    ^^ I found this so touching ... this could have been a beautiful ending :) but the one you wrote suits it best :)

    one suggestion.. make all the i's capital :)

    keep writing..

  • 11 years ago

    by H E Losey

    A nice story well formatted. I would add punctuation. Remember that rhythm/metre is what changes a group of words from prose to poetry. Poetry does not need rhyme but it demands rhythm/metre and I think this is a bit lacking here.