Wow. i love this poem. its beautiful. and catches me. i just want to hear more. and everyone can connect with it. nice wording :]]

Wow. i love this poem. its beautiful. and catches me. i just want to hear more. and everyone can connect with it. nice wording :]]

Your writing is SO good! It's clear that you have some serious natural talent going on, and the title and everything else is just perfect. Love the rythym, love EVERYTHING about this poem! 5/5 DEFINITELY!

Wow, so amazing. The flow was flawless and I love your use of interesting phrases like :

"my cheeks burn with excitement, turning redder as we wait,"
^haha, I can soooo relate! almost everything makes me cheeks go red, and I can always feel it, like "crap, my cheeks are geting redder", lol

"you're eyes are sparkling, what a golden treasure,"
^I can just picture it, I used a metaphor kinda liek this in m poem, I think it was a light in his eye, maybe a gleam, lol. I love seeing people feel the same emotion but find different ways to express them.

I think you finished and started very strong, and kept the middle very strong too, but made sure the end and beginning were slightly bolder, which is hard to do when you have such a great opening and end, to keep the middle just as strong, and not have it fade away. Amazing!

5/5 +++++

Your tongue presses mine, theres not a soul to witness.
the magical sensation as the sparks fly between us.
^^ Not liking the rhyme here love .

i must now remember that oh-so-sweet taste.
^^ This doesn't flow so well with the line above . Try a syllable count .

then i smile up at your glowing face. The night is running late.
^^ This throws off the flow too .

Over all , really good . I like the idea . But , just those few suggestions for some fixer-upping ;) .