I loved the concept. I'm not sure if it came across the way you intended it to or not. I thought it was very confusing. Not the poem itself, just that fact that it was both complicated and simplistic at the same time. It was beautiful, and in a way, very hard to read. Nicely done.
This takes me back to a book I read. I think it was the Wizard of Oz, the book. In there was a tiny town of china people. as in china glass. they would fall, and get chipped. 5/5 on this poem, and thnx for the comment. greatly apprieciated.