Comments : Depression

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    See its this problem i have
    Deep down inside of me
    Continuous foul moods
    And tantrums thrown wildly

    (wow your diction is great. i love how you decscribed your problem. very deep.)

    Depression does that though
    Many can relate
    Every thought filled
    Not with love but only hate

    (good here, wouldhave liked it if you would have uses stronger diction here though)

    Not of others though
    Only of yourself you see,
    Its a shame though
    You tend to feel suicide is the only way to be free

    (The flow is a little off in this stanza, but I can relate to you)

    Sure people take medication
    To feel normal again
    The only thing is
    You get addicted and what to do you do then

    (Nice, makes me feel like I'm reading a book)

    People think depression is small
    And they think nothing of it
    Walk in my shoes people
    Im sure you will love it...

    (Great ending, not as powerful as the start, but good. keep it up. Shanik).