Ok i read it and the flow is jsut amaizing , but a few pointers ,

when you do a long 1 block poem , it jsut make the eye of the reader refuse to look , it would be best to seperate them bu stanza since the flow do seperate it by "only yesterday"

i lvoed it simplicity , and the emotion behind it made me relate in very close way ,..

i love fre verse but a strong poem , always have rhyming to push the intensity of it ...

5/5

I liked it. I like the type of writing that you used. but i agree with sepertating the stanzas just to make it a little easier to break apart. But other than that i really do like it. It sorta reminds me of a version of Romeo and Juliet in a way!! 5/5