There were good parts, and okay parts. I have to say, though, that your first stanza was not a good one. It seemed weak, and didn't really grab me.

However, I loved the second stanza. It flowed well, and had a good rhyme.

I think the third stanza would've been better if you'd of cut the third line down a little, to let it flow better.

The closing stanza was rather powerful, and what made it more so, was obviously the last line. A great way to end the piece - on a strong note.

Brad

I love your poems. good job

Wow, this is really good (:

My favorite parts were the last two lines of the first stanza, and the last stanza all together, :p

Good job!

I can relate to this alot