I love the way this is written. Your words are set and have meaning, but at the same time I can sense some sort of confusion and disarray. Nicely done :] 5/5.

-Rolo

I just love this..
it's more than I thought it would be..
First off, the flow went really well..I mean REALLY WELL.
I couldn't find any flaws in your piece.
I love the last lines..or shall I say line. it took my attention of the world just to focus on it.
very well written
Write on
xx

Ok let me say about this poem , i can say the idea was good te expression was good

butttt

the structure was not good and the rhyming was nearly not present .
this poem have many petneital but with litlle more effort she will be great

hope you fix it

^__^