Comments : Bisque Doll

  • 15 years ago

    by Teria

    "With my lovely curls - my dress in place
    My hair is bright and shining - no mess trace
    Now watch my lovely Bisque face break."
    - Obviously the poem wouldn't be good without these lines. But the last one, I don't quite think fits there. IT does but I think that it'd be good on it's own or if you changed the other two lines a bit (which I absolutely loved) I wish I could suggest not changing a thing - all three lines are perfect. Just not together. (The first two are, the last one isn't).