Comments : You're my missing piece

  • 15 years ago

    by CanUKissAwayMyPain

    Those twinkling lights in the gloomy sky
    Are they the same stars we starred that night?
    They look pale and about to die
    Why can't they be so bright?

    ^i agree with the comment above me. gloomy sky is a kool and new word to decribe the sky. first i have ever read. intreges the reader to keep on going. sorry if my spellof words suck. just yeah sorry..

    The song by "Regina Spektor" called "The Call"
    Is it the same song I used to listen?
    It sounds so stupid and droll
    Why can't it be nice and pleasant?

    ^hmm... you made me think here. i get what u r sayin but yet im confused in my mind.

    This classic "Family Feud" game
    I can't believe we played till dawn
    This is so lousy and lame
    Why can't it be interesting and fun?

    ^thatz cute. it's a bit boring but yet you keep on going. bring back memories this part =]

    I think I know the answer
    I can't pretend and say don't know
    Yes, it won't make our story reflow
    Yet, it doesn't matter
    I just want you to know
    You're my missing piece and I love you so.

    ^awwww... wonderful way of ending your poem here. the last line it was realie touching and beauitful. i enjoyed reading it indeed =] keep up the great work.

    5/5
    TaKe CaRe,
    Frenchy