Comments : This is my life

  • 15 years ago

    by Mary

    Great Poem
    Im really srry for your loss
    I really liked the flow of the poem and its rhyme scheme but i would like to just point out some things

    surrounded by silence
    sitting in the dark away from all the violence

    ^ I think the sitting in the dark should be separate from away from all the violence like this:

    Surrounded by silence
    Stting in the dark
    Away from all the violence

    But overall it was great =)