Wow this is an excellent poem! It flows well and the rhyming was great. Really like the way you just out it all together and Terrific poem

Wow Cara i love how you penned down this poem each and every single line of it is so true. Nowadays people's mind seems to be corrupted by money and fame, alwayz wanting more whereas people on the other side of the continent would be glad to have a quarter of wat they already have.No doubt the flow was great and also what you penned down is true.I absolutely love

Excellent Job
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It's true.. It's seems that we 4got about all those nice feelings.. 5/5

Nice message in this poem, very true and honesty is key when writing about these sort of issues in the world. The rhyming flowed very well and the overall poem was a beautiful piece!

Hey Cara yeah this is a good one girl and true too, it never ceases to amaze me just how materialistic people can be, i've even seen it on this site and ev en more so over Christmas, its something that seems to be much more prevalent amongst the younger people, maybe thats what maturity is about?
As one ages i think you tend to realise the true value of the simple things in life, like a sunset for instance
Well donethis was different more so because of your age

Grant

I am so happy that you wrote this, many of us need to read this. It is very inspiring to just enjoy life without all the money aspects...
In the era we are living in, it seems to be all that matters. I am so happy that you chose to write this it is full of meaning and I am sure many people can relate. 5/5

I like this poem. it is nice and sweet. have a great year
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Aaron

A good message, and a good poem. I think the piece started off really well, but that it kind of lost it's power as it went on.

I think the last stanza needs a lot of work. the lines weren't as long, so it didn't flow with the other stanzas. Also, I didn't like that the last two lines didn't rhyme. I think it's important to make a strong finish, and while you did that with the last line, I think the fact you didn't rhyme at the end, sort of threw the whole piece out of sync.

Overall, though, I thought this was a good piece.

Brad

Cara, the title of your poem made me recall the opening line of that old 60's song 'Money'. I totally agree with the sentiment of your poem. Though we all need some money to survive, a life based on only materialism and wealth, is in the end, a complete waste! But companies and ads constantly try to lure us into this lifestyle. Your poem's a good reminder of life's true treasures.

I like this poem, but I still want a dodge Viper