Comments : Cherry Blossom Trees. [Haiku]

  • 15 years ago

    by Steven Topaz

    Well i hope your already going to do one of mine under your free comments thing but the least i could do is comment this one for you, well lets see

    I thought haikus were 5 7 5! this one is 6 7 5 lol or it may just be my accent, i would of loved to see you turn this into a poem, Not much you can say in 3 short lines but you did a good job,

  • 15 years ago

    by Crystal Rose Blooming

    I love Cherry blossoms, their colors delicate. You did a good job bringing the picture to life.

  • 15 years ago

    by Cyber Saiyan

    This is a nice little poem.

    I did not care for the title of the poem very much. With a poem this short, I thought that too much was given away by the title.

    I also thought that the first line was too constricted by the 5-7-5 structure. If you speak the line out loud, you automatically put the word AND between Pink and Ruby. I think it sounds odd if you do not use AND.

    The second line is good as well. Although it does have 7 sylabales, I know some people pronounce BEAUTIFULLY as BEA TIF LY instead of BEAT I FUL LY. If anyone says the line is too short, that would be why.

    A good poem overall. 4/5.

  • 15 years ago

    by Teria

    The title of this poem really caught my attention and what I imagined in .. well, my imagination is what I read but better. You captured the imagery of such a scene so vividly that it almost took my breath. Almost, not quite. Lol, but you did a swell job with this haiku. And, I absolutely love good haikus. This is definitely one of them.

    5/5