Sweety , i know it si very hard to let somone go ,

but i klnow too , that you dont deserve this , you deserve more than this guy did ,

no matter what is the thng always keep in mind , that he was a liar and dotn deserve your tears and wait

it was good pice for you and porcy , she is a good writer sn enrich the poetry a lot ^_^
great p[oem for you 5

Wow this poem is absolutely fantastic. I mean the idea is just brilliant.Having to compare your feelings with addiction to a drug.

Where are you, sweet cocaine? My addiction must be fed.

^^ I like the idea that u describe ur addiction as sweet too

Too bad there isn't a quit-line to help with my addiction to you

^^ I love the way you end this poem...no matter how you try to get over the drug nothing can help u to ease off ur addiction

Seriously the both of you have done an excellent job on this. I couldn't tell which lines are whose. Both your words and hers intertwine very smoothly;)

Excellent Job
5/5 from me

To start your title was just captivating!!! : ) good start

" My pricked ears craved your words; my body needed your touch;
My heart grew attached to you, oh God, way too much."
^^ may i say you picked the perfect adjectives!! i mean jesh it was intense to read let alone picture happening : ) great great great job

Stanza 2: my x's have been addicted to things and they have explained what it is like and may i say that was a perfect connection/correlation i mean when you feel this way for someone it is overwhelming! you can never havve enough

aww..sad ending : / i hate it when this kind of thing occurs im sorry ! great poem though i mean it was just beautiful i enjoyed it very much ! 5/5 for sure

Wow! That was truly wonderful very emotional and touching one of the best i'd say.

How could I be so naive? In the end you're all the same.
Fake, pretend "I love you's" are the lies I have to blame.
I couldn't see your true intentions, false kisses made me blind,
That's what drugs do to you, they control your heart, your mind.

My favourite stanza.
Just wow left me speechless. Wonderfull work both Cara and A Porcelain Heart

Dear ladies,

A beautiful collab, it flowed and rhymed beautifully.
About the message: some people have that power, to make us addicted to their love. Once you are hooked you cross every line you ever draw in the sand for yourself, just to stay close to him. I have been there many times and I have just one advice to you both: stay your own person and be sure the realtionship remains an equal one..otherwise you will be burned very badly in the end and stand to lose your dignity and self respect.

Hugs,

5/5 Ingrid

I could hear both voices so clearly in this poem. I loved the idea you used of comparing your love to a drug addiction, with no quit line to help you out. This stanza was my favorite:
"How could I be so naive? In the end you're all the same.
Fake, pretend "I love you's" are the lies I have to blame.
I couldn't see your true intentions, false kisses made me blind,
That's what drugs do to you, they control your heart, your mind."
I thought this was beautifully written. Definite 5/5 from me, for both of you.

"You aren't coming back so I have to just give up the wait."
[You're not coming back so I hve to just give up the wait]

"Too bad there isn't a quit-line to help with my addiction to you"
[Too bad there isn't a quit-line to help with my addiction for you]

- I'm going to be completey honest about the two lines above that I changed - I only changed them because I thought they would sound better worded differently. I proved myself right, if I proved the same to you or anyone else, well then that's for you guys to figure out. I just like the way they sound changed instead of the other way.

Your poem though, it's very original. You have good taste in vocabulary and you word yourself quite well, if I may say so. I liked all phrases, such as; 'daily dose', 'sweet cocaine', 'that's what drugs do to you, they control your heart, your mind' (loved that one <<), 'quit-line'. They're ALL very creative as well as the other things you used through-out the poem.

Well done. :) :) :)

I like the way the way you repeatedly reffered to love as a drug, which anyone who's actually been in love knows that's rather true, although, the same can be said for people in lust. I thought the piece had great content, and the words you used to express it was also first-rate.

However, I didn't like the last line. It would've been fine if it was in a stanzas, but as a line on it's own, I think just didn't work, sorry.

Brad

Wow, drugs, lol. good one, long, but good. 5/5