"both sides staring at the pies in stack."
- I do NOT like the use of 'pies in stack'. I thought at first you meant 'piles'. Though I can see how pies somehow could oddly enough work out here, I don't like it. Others might. I don't like it because it takes attention away from the poem and settles it on that specific word. I guess I settled on it specificly because I didn't like the usage of it, haha. Maybe you did mean to use 'piles' maybe not, either way I don't like the usage of pies in that line, haha.

Other than that one thing, I absolutely adored this poem. You had other words that made me go 'wow' But it was a good wow. More phrases than words, such as; 'jingles of rain', 'decorating the wind', and 'forgotten blood floods up the brain'. You did a very nice job putting this poem together. With nice, vivid imagery. Unimaginable similes/metaphors and great word usage.

Kudos for the poem, kudos galore (;