Comments : Turning Away From Skies

  • 15 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    IT IS PAIN FULL. BUT GOOD

  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    This is a sad write indeed. I can feel the pain that you are going through. The used of metaphor was greatly expessed.

    My hate is like a black sheet
    It covers all my crystal words
    Anger is pouring magma from volcano
    I scream for worthless memories

    ^^^ I like te way you end it. Crystals may be glittery but when it's coverd with a black sheet you couldn't see it's glitter.The use of metaphor here enable me to visualize the boiling anger.No matter how much you scream it's useless

    Overall you did a fantastic job. I love each & every stanza of it

    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Ares

    The way you portray your emotions here is fantastic, it's very difficult to convey strong emtions like that, but you did it beautifully:)