Thank you for the critique i really liked it,

i dont think you got the whole view of this poem tho, i wrote it about my boyfriends bestfriend who comitted suicide and how he tried to look at life like it was amazing, but it just didnt help, and he ended up killing himself.

it wasnt really about soliders .. but about those who are soliders in life with suicide and depression

like to write love on her arms day.

i should probally clarify this within the poem