Comments : To be as She

  • 15 years ago

    by Armada the Gestalt

    The ending two lines make this poem, if you ask me. You're not, but I'll say it anyway.

    The second stanza is also good, however, the third lacks the spark the rest has, and brings an otherwise fantastic piece down a tad.

    I feel vampiric poems are overdone but you've breathed a little fresh air into an otherwise tired subject.