Comments : Don't think of me as gone

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    This is an awesome poem indeed. Anything is possible when there is hope.

    all the best and take care

  • 15 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Even though this poem is sad it has a powerful message. What I take away from the write is that someone has died and gone to heaven and is telling their loved one, not to be sad or cry. That you will meet them again in heaven and your love will be renewed. Excellent write, the flow is good, simple but powerful words used to convey your message. Good job. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Welcome back :) What a beauty you have come back with.

    Don't think of me as gone
    My life has just begun
    Stop sorrows lonely tears
    Its not yet my setting sun

    I love the hope in this stanza. That there is something there to still live for.

    Rather I soar up swiftly
    Gliding majestic bird of flight
    smiling on my lunar passage
    Draped in canvas of velvet night

    What a picture your words have painted for the minds eye.

    Dashing through open meadows
    Amber waves dance in the breeze
    Lords merciful radiance and glory
    Brightly shines down upon me

    Love the word choices and imagery portrayed through the entire poem.

    Lifted by lights eternal peace
    Heaven's pearly gates open slow
    Once again finding my feet
    Familiar faces greet me as I go

    What a wonderous feeling I got when reading this stanza.

    Lovingly I stare back down
    gazing at earth from on high
    See you again soon my love
    Renewing our love in the sky

    What a great ending.
    Excellent job son!
    Love you
    Mom

  • 15 years ago

    by Deana

    Your poem is beautiful and full of hope and love. Your rhymes are perfect and the flow is great but the message is the beauty of this write. I hope that all your hopes and dreams are realized!

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Very lovely heartfelt write...

    "Stop sorrows lonely tears
    Its not yet my setting sun"
    ^^ loved how these words are consoling the one who is left back ...

    and the jouney to the heavenly abode is beautifully described...

    "Lovingly I stare back down
    gazing at earth from on high"
    ^^ loved it...looking back for someone left...

    "See you again soon my love
    Renewing our love in the sky "
    ^^ beautiful lines... very touching ...