Great idea but needs some polishing, also needs some punctuation. I think that now you'd the idea of the poem, all you needs to do is put it together. We all learn that way. Well done anyway, kel.

The capitals really bothered me .. They threw me off alot . But I like how in some of your poems you can make statements artistic . This one is really well done again .. Except for a few spelling mistakes and such . 5/5

This is adorable..

So much passion and emotion throughout the piece, and I enjoyed the sincerity throughout the poem.

I liked the imagery in this, and I found the closing lines to be so sweet, really warms the reader's heart.