This is good. let me know how you end it, when you do. pretty good. nice flow

The flow within this poem is very good and the rhyming works nicely. I really loved your ending I thought it was powerfull and captivating, so overall really great job, it deservs a 5/5

I like it. U've described very well how exactly it is like for a soldier. Somethings you should have a look at tho:

``Your body has froze.
--> It should be '...has frozen'

``The enemy have got you,
--> I think it should be '... captured you' or maybe some other word, 'got' doesn't really seem to flow well... just an opinion :).

I still think it's a great write and would love to read the end, when u decide on one. Do let me know! :)

5/5

WOW!! This is also an amazing poem It has such a great flow. And it as great rhyming! I don't think there's really anything you can change! It's perfect 5/5

Soda.

I too hvn't written in a while and i thought i had lost my gift of writing but you are proof that the gift of poetry cannot be lost- a beautiful poem - never stop writing
5/5