Comments : Hi

  • 12 years ago

    by Cindy

    This is really a beautiful poem. I love the imagery.

    Thanking my good fortune, holding you close to my heart.
    Praying to the Lord above, our lives paths will never part.

    Just when things are at their darkest.....it seems we always find a light to bring us hope. That someone who brings smiles back to our life.

    Lying entranced, your head on my shoulder under a velvet sky.
    Two lovers found each other, it all started with a simple, "hi".

    I love the simpleness of the ending. We find things in the least expected places. Sometime they have been right in front of us the entire time.
    Great job!
    Love Cindy

  • 12 years ago

    by Sylvia

    I don't know how I missed this one. A beautiful, simple love poem. It is happy, sweet, romantic and the last line is the best. It all started with a simple Hi. Excellent work. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by XxBAYBiiGiRLxX

    The ending completes the poem and showed me why itwas called hi!
    great wording and great flow!
    well written keep it up!
    xo

  • 12 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Hope to meet lucky women someday. This is really a very special poem and has been written beautifully. Glad to see a love poem coming from you. Great write friend.

    all the best and take care

  • 12 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Alrighty dear bro I am so glad you were able to express your emotions about this beautiful woman in your life. She seems as though she was the angel waiting in the wings. Beautiful write dear. The picture you paint is a magical, romantic scene and theres no place you would rather be than where you are. Wonderful job..
    I think you got so excited with this and missed this but it should be shining with one N instead of two.
    It is funny but those two letters "Hi" were the start of mine and Wally's relationship. I am loving that you wrote this and know how you feel. All the luck in the world to you dear.

  • 12 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Nicely written with beautiful sentiment within. Great rhyming..

    My only criticism...the two line couplet arrangement is a bit distracting...I'd try putting them in 4 line stanzas instead...nicely done...beautiful dedication...Love Aunt Debbie

  • 12 years ago

    by sneha

    Well written.last 2 lines my fav.5

  • 12 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    What a nice dedication to your special someone. I am glad you found someone who inspires you to write in happy style. i know how you love the dark side :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    This is indeed a beautiful love poem. So well written and expressed.. to that special someone. Bravo!

  • 12 years ago

    by mandy

    Beautifully written and very sweet. The flow was consistent, and I really liked the format you chose. Great write, 5/5!

    mandy :)