Rachel.....this is such a beautiful poem. Congrats on taking 2nd place in the contest :)

When nothing seems to matter
The world just moves on by
And when your love is taken
Will you forever cry

This stanza just really grabbed my heart. It seems like since this happened...The tears have no end. How long is forever. Is it till we cease to breathe?

Is forever till the end of time
Something true love seals
I believe we'll never know
How forever really feels

I believed in forever at one time:( Now I'm left to wonder on my own. Hoping that there will be another chapter.
This really is such a heart felt write.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

I think the only thing people truly care about when it comes to forever, is being with the person we love forever. But no matter how amazing the relationship is or how in love you are...one day its all going to end and its hard to think about that day. Amazing job glad to see you posted something for once :p 5/5 GG23

This is a very beautifully written piece and i wonder y it has been downvoted.
I really loved it, great write.

all the best and take care

I find it difficult to write to a title, it puts a box around my thoughts and it always ends up with a load of flaws that are too frustrating to fix.

The absence of punctuation made for a quicker reading. The first stanza had a nice flow, and the rhyme wasn't noticably forced. I'm sure you meant to spell 'calamity' though.

The third and fourth stanzas were notably stronger than the first and second. I didn't really get much out of them, but it was a nice read, and the repetition was put to good use. A good write all in all, I'd just revise the first two stanzas as they read quite one dimensionally.

When nothing seems to matter
The world just moves on by
And when your love is taken
Will you forever cry

^^ I loved this stanza best.
Indeed I believe a person can mourn for a lost love a whole life long. I witnessed it myself with my gandmother. She became a widow at age 40 and stayed alone for the rest of her life. My grandfather was her true love and she remained his bride:)

Beautiful poem, Rachel.

5/5 Ingrid

Sorry I missed this one...very beautiful sentiments...

"Is forever till the end of time
Something true love seals
I believe we'll never know
How forever really feels "

^Something we will never know....or will we? Some have it I believe...

Nicely written with great flow and rhyme....Love, Mom