Comments : Im From

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Overall nice simple write, I took your poem and made some ajustments to it that I think made the flow and structure much better.
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    I'm from the secret
    that has never been told
    From the words
    that shall never unfold.

    I'm from a rose petal,
    red as velvet, gentle and soft.
    From bright colors and stuffy rooms
    to a crowded loft.

    I'm from a mind full of laughter,
    inspiration, and love with a new style.
    From thoughts shared
    to thoughts being thought about by the mile!

    I'm from the stack of late papers,
    stress, and the valuable unspoken words.
    I am what I am, so don't stereotype me
    until I have been heard.
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    Overall great job, keep it up.

    Peace, Joe