Comments : The widow

  • 15 years ago

    by The Prince

    There's some great imagery in here my friend, some awesome flow that you've got consistently flowing throughout. It's quite dark too, and it allowed the poem to read better, because it suited the atmosphere. The only thing I suggest that in the last stanza, there is a lot of 'she'.
    But thats only one thing I noticed. Another great write from you.

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Hi Grant,

    I know about the black widow spider, she eats her partner after copulation. Really disgusting that is.
    You made a good poem about it, could even have posted it in the dark section, I think.
    I would love to see you write a love poem again because that is what you do best, my sweet friend:)

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 15 years ago

    by Cara

    What a fabulous response to Porcys challenge :]
    I loved it, it was quite dark i thought and before reading this i had no idea what a widow spider was, or did. Thats horrible! Wow. Scary stuff.

    hehe and you even managed to get my name in here!

    Blood red hourglass on carapace
    ^^
    Hehe :]

    It was really well written Grant, the flow, the imagery, everything just added up really well for this piece of poetry.
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Dark and scary. You must have ESP, I have been thinking about Black Widow Spiders this past week. Your images are right on about this creature. In a way it is a love poem in that the male will do anything for this female even if the end result is death. Excellent job. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Ben

    Great job on the poem. I enjoyed the point of view you had on the spider. Nice job, mate. 5/5