Nice write. The flow was Okay, but not great, I'll elaborate in a minute. The structure just like the flow was just average for me...again I'll let you know what I mean in a moment. Your choice of words was well thought out as well as the over messege that lies within, good Job!

Now as for the flow, you have no punctuation what-so-ever in this poem. Punctuation is very important in poetry, it lets the reader know when to pause or stop as well adding to the overall flow.

As I stated above the structure was just okay, this could be fixed by structuring this poem into stanzas or some other form instead of just running it altogether.

Overall a nice write, keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe