I love the unexpected last lines of each stanzas. The way you put them in an organization that made it work for each stanza. I like this poem, it reminds me alot of me to be honest. I enjoy getting comments from you, you are also my fave to get comments on. lol. Anyways, I thought the poem was cery well written and look forward to reading more. 5/5

Thanks Aubrey. it's great to have someone like you to read my poems. I don't let people in my real life outside of my couple of poetry sites read my stuff. I guess it makes it less personal on the website like this one because the person reading can't see your face...don't know who you are. They just know your pain in every word that you right.

It's funny actually your poems and the way you write some of them gave me the flow to this one. I haven't really wrote any that sounded like this. It's all thanks to you!!

Well, I am glad that I can be of some inspiration to you. I enjoy reading your words. It's a new path way to discover the person behind the words if you know what I mean. At least, that's what writing is to me. But you are very welcome, you can expect to hear more of my comments every time you write another poem :). Keep up the good work.

I really like this because its not wordy. You get the point across so well without using too many words. Its full of emotion and hate and anger. Its really good for something you just made up off the top of your head. I really like it.