There was a common theme among the entire poem that just oozed romance. Really, I'm not a huge fan of romantic poetry - it's just too soppy for my liking, haha, but that's entirely a personal thing.

The opening stanza set the tone nicely.

"Prayed amongst the stars using prayer beads"

^^ I didn't like that you used 'prayed' and 'prayer' in the one line here, it just didn't fit nicely. Even if you'd used a different word such as 'wished', so it read: "Wished amongst the stars using prayer beads" the same concept is given; that the persona is praying.

"you kept me warm even when it was bleak.
Perfect within my eyes, nothing to critique
all I can do is boast a immense smile."

^^ I felt the flow seemed to go off here, and I'm not quite sure why. Sometimes it seems like you're focusing too much on trying to get words out there, filled with descriptions. That's not needed, just let them flow. Also, it should be "an" immense smile.

I LOVE how you ended this. The lyrics with the song fitted in nicely with the theme of this poem, and the ending acted wonderfully as the cherry on the cake.

Joe
Looks complicated to me. You pulled it off and have a wonderful poem to show for it.

I'll get weak in the knees,
unable to see, and unable to speak;
you held me up tall smiling with glee,
and stayed with me, cheek to cheek.
Together writing a devout potpourri
deep within our hearts jubilee;
vividly glistening white rose leek
in the distance of the mountain peak.
And through all the years you cared for me,
"you saw the best there was in me."

When we love someone we stand by them through all the trials and tribulations that are thrown at us in life. Holding the other up and standing by them makes us stronger and only deepens a love.
Great job!
Take Crae
Cindy

Oh wow, this really touched me. Although I had never heard of this style, after reading the explanation he seems somewhat difficult, and its evident you put much time thought and work into putting out a lovely piece. Its beautifully written, I love your choice of words, such as "amidst the beautiful resonant violin"... it just makes me weak.

Really liked the glosa: never have read one before, and knew right away from where the lyrics were from. good choice! very good imagery, and vocabulary usage. played well with the verses from the song. very interesting read! i may have to try one of these for myself. thanks for the inspiration!

Tom

Haha, my eyes became watery from reading this, it's a true masterpiece, and it's ever so beautiful. You did an astounding job with this. Celine Dion is an amazing singer, and your glosa verse just captures the beauty in her song. :) Thank you for sharing!

Bri~

Obviously you know my thoughts on this, and I think you should be immensley proud of this piece. You took a incredibly difficult form and nailed it. Well done.

Danny

You were my strength when I was weak.
You were my voice when I couldn't speak.
You were my eyes when I couldn't see.
You saw the best there was in me

now thats what i'm talking about
that inspires me to live for God and trust in him all the way and not fear anything
i pray what ever girl comes along for you is a blessing for you the rest of your life Joe=-)
Trust in God first do not lean on your own understanding but his thats wisdom anyways thanks for everything you've done for me to day may God richily be with you=-)
btw you deserve lots of praise=-)