I used drained as it fits in with her just melting into the floor with her tears

I really like this one. but in the last stanza:

Her pain was unbearable,
she curled up in a ball,
breaking down crying,
she just lay on the floor.

"ball" and "floor" doesnt rhyme.
at the end of the rest of the stanzas they rhyme. might wanna change that. hmmm. idk what to tho.

but other than that good job. =]

will you check out some of mine some time and tell me what you think. i'd greatly appreciate some constructive critism =]

Very powerful, well done. 5/5, Em