Most of this made me chuckle... but I don't think that was your intention, sorry. lol

I quite liked the line...

<heaven right in the middle of hell.>

Very nicely put. :) You did a good job with this piece. The rhyming was spot on.

5/5 :)

Bri~

I absolutely love this poem. I like how you penned this forbidden love and your thoughts on it. I agree with Aureus

heaven right in the middle of hell

^^^ This like stood out for me too. I like the way you express and phrase it.

Well though, having to cheat behind someone's back maybe thrilling, but in the end we only get ourself burned when the truth surface up.

Excellent Job
5/5

Wow I think this would make for a great song. The words just seemed to flow wonderfully and with it being set to music I think it would be fantastic.

I really liked your ending stanza !!!

Thanks for sharing your words, nice read.