This poem has real potential the surface feelings are explored with much honesty. I feel the poem has the potential to go deeper and to unearth that underlying cause. There are a couple of typos "thats seems to be taken over me" - That seems to have taken over me? Or that seems to be taking over me? "It doesn't feel normal I know is
something internal" - It doesn't feel normal I know it is something internal. Or I know it's something internal.

Wow....this is what I am going through... I love it:)