Micheal
I love the Etheree's...you did a awesome job on this one. How dark and spine chilling it was to read your words. You could feel the fear coming from this piece.
Excellent!
((hugs))
Cindy

I agree with Cindy. You can feel and taste the fear in this one. As usual an excellent write from you. 5/5

Hi sweetheart:)

You did a wonderful job on this, I could feel the fear as it oozed off the page, he he.

Oh, I miss you so! I hope the house is nearly done now!

((hugs)) xx

Ingrid

"Dark
Stone walls
Swell with pain,"
`I like the usage of the word swell here, never quite heard something like that before!! Loved your alliteration as well.

"A white vacuum,
Gorged on feral fear,
Force fed with icy fist."
`Your words are perfect! Some other great alliterations, not sure if they were on purpose or not!

I wont comment on the rest, you did a very great job with this piece.. it was extremely dark! Lots and lots of alliterations in this piece but they worked nicely together. Great choice of words, and flawless flow. You did a great job, I loved the choice of form as well, that tended to help with the flow a lot more.

5/5.

Temps