Comments : Unpredictable Tomorrow

  • 10 years ago

    by Deana

    Surrender to a glorious sunrise
    and shadows that may fall between
    for even within a droplet of rain
    magic and miracles can be seen .

    I can feel your strength in this Luanne, you are a strong person. We never know what kind of blow life can deal us , all we can do is continue to find hope in life and love and true friends...I will always be here for you. This is a great write, wonderfully put together.

  • 10 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Luanne,
    I am sure this was an extremely hard write for you but as always you have managed to pull it off with beauty, style and gracefulness. In my opinion this is one of the most beautiful and encouraging poems you have written. Fantastic Job Dear and very well said.
    Take Care,
    Kay

  • 10 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    This gave me the chills, it does take a lot of courage and strength to write something like this. You did a very great job though, I really liked the line where you said you dont know what to tomorrow brings, that is the absolute truth. There's not much to say for this piece, it takes a very strong person to write something like this.

    Well done. Thanks for sharing.

    5/5.

  • 10 years ago

    by Faithless

    I must say that i like the tone that you set in this poem. Though the poem start off with sadness but i can see the smooth transition from sad to determination. The imaginery that you have painted is fantastic. It was certainly a delightful to read this poem.Keep it up

    Excellent Job
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by The Prince

    I'm glad you didn't force this. It's a chilling write and I admire you for it. Liked the inclusion of the footnote at the end.

    'isolate - spirits in a cage'

    Liked the imagery here. Spirits in a cage gave me a feeling of entrapment. A sad image.

    'To drink life from a half-filled cup'

    Loved the optimism of the 'half filled cup', still - it only being 'half' is quite sad in a way, but contrasted to it being 'half empty'.

    Loved the imagery in the last stanza, it was quite striking, almost. Not going to pick this poem apart in any way but I'm going to nominate it because it's strong and admirable. Well done. :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Nee

    First of all I would like to say that I'm often most in love with closures of the poems, but here..I'm so in love with the first stanza =)

    To drink life from a half-filled cup
    swallow with dignity and pride
    worth not measured by the exterior
    but what lives and grows inside

    You don't know how much this stanza got to me..Luu you've made a wonderful job penning the words here and the image you put..very well done..my fave stanza !!

    Surrender to a glorious sunrise
    and shadows that may fall between
    for even within a droplet of rain
    magic and miracles can be seen ...

    Know what I said in the beginning? yes I'm also in love with your closure here, especially, the last two lines, me and my friends were just discussing the "If we want to accomplish something..we can do it as long as we deeply believe we can !"

    Amazing job my amazing-est Luu ^-^
    Write on

  • 10 years ago

    by Rashnique

    Wow i love this poem. my mom has m.s.

  • 10 years ago

    by LoreNz0

    Strong words from an incredibly strong person. your perspective has not been lost through ur hard times, and ur clearly much braver than manny could hope to b. you are inspirational and i wish you all the best for wht the future holds

    -Lorenzo

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    Whole piece is beautiful. I admire message within your words, its meaningful. Message itself became so powerful, because you at the same time managed to compare, and express, true weight of pain and positivity.
    All in all, I was impressed by creativity and beauty of this poem. I also like the fact that you kept same rhythm through entire poem, instead of forcing your rhymes. Subject seems very difficult for writing, so that gives poem even more power.

    -Sadness, the world within our mind -
    ^Its probably my mistake, but I don't see why in this line you wrote mind instead of -minds-

    Another interesting thing about this one, is that you have described your message within each stanza, and yet they are excellently connected into one picture. Also, you portrayed both side of emotions. I want to say that I am impressed that you've managed to describe anguish and hope, equally, and that gave whole picture a lot of intensity.

    Overall I enjoyed in this poem.