Comments : Rhymes

  • 15 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    I actually enjoyed reading this. There are a couple of rough spots, but you also had some great lines and imagery, I don't think it is worthy of "worst poem ever"

    I think I'll get out there someday,
    but someday you'll be gone.
    I'm scared you'll be ridin' towards the sunset
    while I'm smashing into dawn.

    ^I love this part, absolutely beautiful part, I love the image and feeling you provoke here. Don't be so hard on yourself, it was enjoyable.