Comments : Untitled

  • 15 years ago

    by InvisiblyHeartless

    This is interesting.
    Personally, I think it needs to be a little longer.
    I also didn't like the last stanza, it sort of threw the poem into a weird place.
    I like the way you repeat the middle word in the first two lines of stanza 1 and 3.
    I enjoyed it, maybe change the last stanza or make it longer would make it better. A little more emotion too, but it sounds good.

  • 15 years ago

    by xToBeWithYoux

    I love this Tara!! I love how the end stanza ties in with it being untitled, and I like it being untitled, gives it a sense of mystery.

    I love it, 5/5

    Keep writing,
    Emily :)