Well done. Another write outside your comfort zone and you are becoming skilled at that. Emotions and feelings expressed powerfully. I do like this. 5/5

Such a sad poem Tempsy and although you say it's not personal I prefer to see you write pinky poems, or nature poems.
It's beautifully written though, as always:)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

I'm not one for dark poems but I rather like this poem. It's dark yet it just exposes how we all feel for at least one moment in our lives, even if it's only for a minute. The flow was great and the word choice was spot on :)

5/5

This was an awesome write, you have portrayed a deeply sad image. Capturing the intensity and expressing it perfectly to the reader. Wonderful job!