Comments : The train ride through my life...

  • 15 years ago

    by Steady Stereotype

    The flow in the write is off, expecially in the first verse. Though after it flowed more naturally.

    "It's like a lullaby as the baby cries,
    Like the painful nightmare where sadly the truth hides,"

    This is a great line and my favourite in this poem. A lullaby of a babies cries. A non cliche yet bittersweet meaning. Well done.