Comments : Loosing Battle

  • 15 years ago

    by Minkus

    This poem looks to be on the same subject as "Past Memory," on the visits to the grave, but perhaps not.

    Some of the lines seemed out-of-place in this poem. The third lines of both the second and the third stanza came out of nowhere, with little or no apparent relevance to the rest of the poem. I thought you expressed yourself well in the final stanza. One small thing is that "losing" only has one o in it. Other than that, good job and keep it up!