Comments : Dreams And Daggers

  • 14 years ago

    by Sweet Disposition

    This is exactly how I'm feeling. Really nice, emotive write. Good job!

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    She realized he was gone
    Dreaming simply to remember
    Two stupid confused kids
    Memories fade into embers

    *This is so sad, but at the same time very beautiful. I love the imagery and the diction*

    Pain envelopes her heart
    Tears fall into the ashes
    Veins are cauterized shut
    Her life, all but crashes

    *Wow...your diction is so intense here. I love how stong this stanza is*

    Numbed to her own reality
    Daggers pierce her heart
    Each new face drives it deeper
    Remaining complex as Descartes

    *You have such a way with words. The flow is amazing and the style is one of my favorites*

    This is the beginning
    Dreams and daggers thrive
    Forgetting love....and him
    Waiting to be revived....

    *This was such a good poem. I didn't see any errors. Very deep and emotional piece. Keep it up. Nik*

  • 14 years ago

    by Wishmaster

    This is extremely ironic for me, because last night, my "family" got into a huge argument and I ended up leaving @ 2 in the morning. This is, if I can be inserted into the character's sopt, my hope for light at the end of the tunnel. Very good as it speaks to me

    5/5
    Wishmaster