It's really interesting. If you hadn't put it in the nature section I would have thought that the entire poem was a giant metaphor It's really a nice poem and very vividly painted.

Very well done and I enjoyed your choice of words at certain points. I think that this at points really shows a picture that you want it to. It also can at times fall off, almost like you forced the rhythm at the end or something, like you thought about it before you put it down there.

either way it was a good poem and I gave it a five because that is what i felt it deserved for the painted picture that you have.