Comments : The Path (Haiku)

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    This is such a sad Haiku. Feelings of lonliness can be felt in your words.
    So much felt in so little words.
    Good job!
    Take Care
    Cindy

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    It is sad how we neglect things in nature. Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by Corinne

    Nicely done, young man :-)
    I think it should be "lies deserted", though I get them mixed up too :-D

  • 14 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Sourav,
    This is a beautiful poem, very deep, i really could picture thousand meaning behind every word, awesome. Really loved it a lot.

    all the best and take care

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Sourav,

    This poem reads like a Senryu, because a Haiku is strictly about nature and here you have a poem about a path...when you take it literally, you could see it as a path through a landscape..but I don't think you meant it that way.
    Thought provoking, deep..we should not abandon the path we have once chosen, unless we have very, very good reasons.

    Excellent work:)

    Hugs,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Wonderfully penned...
    very deep... but even I think its a Senryu ... as Ingrid said.

    well written

  • 14 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Not understand meaning of this poem.

    please explain.

    Is it related to your life.

  • 14 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    An amazing write Sourav. Deep sadness and loneliness in so little words. Extremely well done.. I loved it!