Comments : Baby Hold Me Tight*

  • 11 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Rain pouring down.
    Baby hold me tight;
    Trying to keep warm,
    Using all our might.

    *I love how you start this. I can picture the two of you in the rain. Nice*

    Wind blowing hard.
    Our umbrella is starting to blow away.
    I want the game to be over
    But in your arms I want to stay.

    *I like how you go from rain to wind. I like how simple your style is. Very easy to read*

    The ball is thrown.
    Another touchdown is scored.
    I look into your eyes
    As the crowd roars.

    *Wow I like how you worked this part in to relate to the part about the game...very clever*

    You pull me closer
    And kiss my lips.
    We let go of the umbrella.
    I've never felt like this.

    *Aww this part is sweet, i like how simple it is. You make him kissing you something beauiful and not trashy. Nice*

    You tell me you love me.
    I tell you I love you too.
    The whistle is blown.
    The game is through.

    *I like how you go back to the game here. It's like a story*

    You look into my eyes
    And hold me tight.
    I see that with you
    Everything will always be alright.

    *I really liked this. It's like a simple love story with it's many twist and turns. I love the iamgery as well. Keep it up. Nik*

  • 11 years ago

    by xXxemzxXx

    I loved this poem its so sweet and full of emotion the imagery was also very powerfull 5/5 well done

  • 10 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I can't even count how many times my fiancee has been at my games in the pouring rain. But I've been to her games too so its just something you sacrafice for someone you love. Because no matter rain or shine the only place you want to be is with the person you love. Great job with this piece.