'Will forever leave with me'
`Did you really mean to say leave or did you mean live?

'These fainting memories

Those fainting memories'
`You said these then you used those, I personally wouldnt use the same line so close together, the repetitiveness did not make a positive effect in my opinion, I would have liked something different instead of having a repeated line in your poem.. it wouldnt jolt the poem as much and the flow.

Temps. [Beyond a Poets Mind]

This is nice. Loved the poem. Some rhymes are forced e.g rent. I think you should consider some other word. The way you ended it as nice but please if this is a true story, please dont hate or distrust for i believe she was among one of the one thousand frogs that you will kiss to get your princess. They best is yet to come.

Those fainting memories
Will forever leave with me
A scar of hate and distrust
That will never go away nor rust.

*This was my favorite stanza. I think this one was stronger than the others. Some of the others were lacking in emotion. But not this one. This was a good way to end a poem. I love the imagery as well. Nice work. Nik*