Michael,

Although this poem is very creative and cleverly written, something is off...I cannot put a finger on it..maybe the use of"he"and "she" idk..I think you have to look at it again to see if it is really coherent.

I will rate it a 5/5 but hope you will take a second look at it.

I will give your friend a different comment, off course, ha ha.

(( hugs)) xx

5/5 Ingrid

ps: I saw the thread, you must have been bored beyond belief;)

Michael
what a collab :)

Infecting these wounds that silently scream,
Paralysed emotions claw to escape.
A seething demon with a vengeful gleam,
Malice now takes an horrific new shape.

What a picture this paints for the minds eye. Very dark. Very different.
I enjoyed reading this piece.
Good job to both of you.
Take Care
(((hugs)))
Cindy