Comments : Mesmerized

  • 14 years ago

    by Cara

    Joeeeee. :]
    This was really simple i thought but really good. I really liked the few simple rhymes, they didnt feel forced and i think they added to your piece.

    but now a secret love is being released
    via my poetic verses for all to see,
    ponder, and prod.

    ^^ Do tell! You know all about my curiosity.. :]

    So other than that im not really sure what to say, it was really cute i felt. :]
    5/5