Wow I thought you did very well with this. Although it did read more like a little story, you really captured what goes through the mind of a Autistic child. I wouldnt change a thing. Not only did you capture it so well, but its a really good piece to educate people about what Autism is and what those that have it experience on a daily basis.

Great job with this.
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Excellent. It took me inside that mind of the teenage girl with Autism, a place I would never want to be for long. I cannot image a parent or a child living with this disease. It robs the children of life as we know it. Well done.

I don't know much about the subject but I think you did a good job of getting inside the mind of one so afflicted with autism.
In the form of a storyline