Comments : Garden Of Life~Acrostic

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "Green grassland stretches wide"
    `I would replace green with something not so vague.

    "Ruby red apples hang delicately,
    Dangling down from branches."
    `Loved your alliteration of the apples. I didnt like how you used hang then said dangling, you kind of repeated yourself here, but dangling in a way adds to the imagery so I think youll be okay with that -

    "Expressive euphonies are heard,
    Notably nurtured by the word of God."
    `Lots of alliterations well done.. very poetic.

    "Fulgent flowers emit breaths of hope,
    Encouraging every melancholy soul."
    `This was truly beautiful, flowers giving breaths of hope to melancholy souls.. giving them a sense of optimism. Loved this -

    5/5. Temps :]

  • 14 years ago

    by Hollow Emotion

    Gentle grassland stretches wide,
    All agriculture richly untainted,
    Ruby red apples hang delicately,
    Dangling down from branches.
    Expressive euphonies are heard,
    Notably nurtured by the word of God.

    the beginning was a great way to start, right away you added imagery to the reader, and you used describtive words.

    Obedient oaks bow respectively,
    Faithful faces they always acquire.

    Again, nice imagery, and i liked how you liked "obedient" and "faithful" those two words go together nicely!

    Leguminous lobelias swiftly flourish,
    Into incantations that can heal,
    Fulgent flowers emit breaths of hope,
    Encouraging every melancholy soul.

    Nice ending, overall, i wouldnt change a thing in this poem. The flow was excellent and the use of descriptive words helped the imagery a lot. Nice job!

  • 14 years ago

    by Hollow Emotion

    Gentle grassland stretches wide,
    All agriculture richly untainted,
    Ruby red apples hang delicately,
    Dangling down from branches.
    Expressive euphonies are heard,
    Notably nurtured by the word of God.

    the beginning was a great way to start, right away you added imagery to the reader, and you used describtive words.

    Obedient oaks bow respectively,
    Faithful faces they always acquire.

    Again, nice imagery, and i liked how you liked "obedient" and "faithful" those two words go together nicely!

    Leguminous lobelias swiftly flourish,
    Into incantations that can heal,
    Fulgent flowers emit breaths of hope,
    Encouraging every melancholy soul.

    Nice ending, overall, i wouldnt change a thing in this poem. The flow was excellent and the use of descriptive words helped the imagery a lot. Nice job!

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    You are talking about me, he he ( last line)

    I loved this MaryAnne, although it's an acrostic it is not forced in any way.

    Good job girl:)

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Kaila

    I loved your vocabulary! Descriptive words are always a favorite for me. Also everything tied together nicely and it was a really enjoyable read. Nice job!
    5/5