A hero, you stood before me
Before you threatened me with the knife
You were a knight in shining armor
The God that gave me life!

*Wow...this stanza blew me away. I love the diction here and the imagery is great.*

The glitter in my eyes
Began to fade away
Your beatings became useless
But you did it all day

*I would change the last line to everyday*

Other than that I think you did a wonderful job. I hope this isn't true, cause it was so sad. But it also made me angry. Anways I loved how each stanza adds on more to the story. Very nice work hun. Nik

:( omg this i soooooo sad, it made me cry.
you make it sound so real, i hope it's not, but this poem is amazing, so descriptive and it just all flows together, it's a story i <3 it so much, it is so sad, but also makes me want to hit something, so good job :) 5/5 katiekins

Hey again im so sorry to hear about your pains you deal with. It must be really hard for you to deal with things like this. I hope that you actually do get up and walk away from him and not escape with a blade to your skin.

Liz

This poem is quite long but you have alot to say and its said well gud i must admit. the topic is touching and i like your story. i do HATE the abusive types. word of advise though if ya in that situation again BEAT the CRAP out of him. if ya can't do that poison him lolz if ya do it well enough he wont hit you ever again lolz. but the best solution was in any case Leave him.