Comments : I found all my friends

  • 14 years ago

    by Corruption

    This is a good poem
    a little suggestion might be to
    add some punctuation
    like commas or something...
    your rhythms are nice

    in the last stanza when you used the word his
    it kinda threw me off abit
    made it seem like there was another random person in the poem
    it took me a few moments to realize that it was actually the reflection in the mirrior you were talking about

    but altogether it is a great piece :)