Comments : The Pain Is Still Here

  • 11 years ago

    by babblingxbrooke

    I'm very glad you realized you deserve something better. very emotional write, and I can't wait to read more of your poetry.

  • 11 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I'm no longer living a fairytale, I once knew
    You gave me everything I thought I wanted
    But in the end, I found you were nothing
    Your specialty was lying

    *I can really relate to this stanza. I know what it's like to fall for someone thinking they are what's best for you and have them hurt you beyond belief in the end. I though you wrote this stanza very well*

    There's been too many nights
    I laid beside you trying to keep the tears in
    With your words burning in my memory
    Wondering why I'm here

    *This was my favorite stanza. I love the imagery you use throughout the whole piece. The style is good and the flow is nearly perfect. I can tell you put your all into this. Very emotional piece. I loved it. Keep it up. Nik*

  • 11 years ago

    by Obscura

    This is a good poem the emotion in this was so rich and powerful the structure is good and well written within the poem there should be a full stop at the end of each stanza but other than that

    well done 5/5