Comments : False Love

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Loved and shoved seemed to be forced, esp. shoved.

    I didnt like the repetition of taste in your last stanza, it threw me off.

    Didnt like the usage of shoved in the last stanza. It didnt make sense to me.

    I think you can work on this and make it better, its not the best write Ive seen from you. Sorry.